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   교정강사   Arah(C)    등록일   2021-11-08
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  A. What was your favorite memory of your father? When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father. One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor. Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father. But, I did love him. I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. He changed little by little. Even if it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly. I could smell him. Also, I could feel his sweetness. Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.
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A. What was your favorite memory of your father?

When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father. 

One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor. 

Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father. 

But, I did love him. 

I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. 

So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. 

He changed little by little. 

Even if that memory isn't so great it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly. 

=> Corrected : The sentence is corrected grammatically. 

I could smell him. 

Also, I could feel his sweetness. 

Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.  ​​