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   제 목   The Volcano of Fire 2    상 태  
   교정강사   Jaylou(C)    등록일   2021-12-23
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  So Thunderhom, stering, Geronimo and talking book Vol, went to Sludge's place and Geronimo freed her! However, Sludge came after them. Luckily, water flowed all over the place, sludge melted in water. And Thunderhorn, stering and Vol, saved Geronimo. And he went back home, happily. I thought about this book and I thought it was about 'care'. Care is important in our lives and we use a lot of it, like we need to care our body, and we can do things better because we care it. You also can care someone, like our family. 'Care' is the most important thing in our lives too!
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Thunderhorn, Sterling, Geronimo and talking book Vol, went to Sludge's place and Geronimo freed her! However, Sludge came after them. Luckily, water flowed all over the place, sludge melted in water. Then, Thunderhorn, sterling and  Vol, saved Geronimo.  And he went back home, happily.       

 I think this book is all about "care". Care is important in our lives and we especially care for ourselves, like we need to care for our body, and we can do things better because we care for it. We also care someone, like our family. 'Care' is the most important thing in our lives too!​