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   제 목   Is it a good idea to ask climbers to pay a deposit?    상 태  
   교정강사   Colleen(C)    등록일   2022-09-07
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  A.) Is it a good idea to ask climbers to pay a deposit? Why or why not? Please elaborate on your answer. Climbing is a challenging leisure sports. So it is vulnerable to accidents. It would be reasonable to permit the climbing only to those who are well preserved. Asking a deposit could be one of good ways to discern whether applicants are qualified or not. B.) Make these sentences into English. (09/07/22) 1. 마음을 털어놓을 수 있는 친구 있으세요? Do you have friends whom you could consult about a concern? 2. 잠시 머리 좀 식히는 거야. I am cooling down my head for a while. 3. 고인의 명복을 빕니다. Pray for the bliss of the dead.
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A.) Is it a good idea to ask climbers to pay a deposit? Why or why not? Please elaborate on your answer.

 

    Climbing is a challenging leisure sports. So it is vulnerable to accidents.

    It would be reasonable to permit the climbing only to those who are well preserved.

    Asking a deposit could be one of good ways to discern whether applicants are qualified or not.

   

=>    Climbing is a challenging leisure sport. So it is vulnerable to accidents.

    It would be reasonable to permit the climbing only to those who are well preserved.

    Asking for a deposit could be one of the good ways to discern whether applicants are qualified or not.​

 

 

B.) Make these sentences into English.

 

(09/07/22)

 

1. 마음을 털어놓을 수 있는 친구 있으세요?

    Do you have friends whom you could consult about a concern? 

 

2. 잠시 머리 좀 식히는 거야.

    I am cooling down my head for a while.  

 

3. 고인의 명복을 빕니다.

   Pray for the bliss of the dead. 

 

• Corrected: The sentences are corrected grammatically.